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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Sashaquain... Reply #13 - Feb 16^th, 2007 at 4:23pm	Print Post
	I like this one very much, Sasha... Ya mind if I play with it a little, since you've had it stored away somewhere for a while... Shadow_Angel wrote on Feb 16^th, 2007 at 1:13am: Sentinel Sky eyes, watcher in mist… behold of love's touch, silken shadows beckon, the sky to fall © Sasha ‘06 Sashaquain sky eyes... watcher in mist, behold our love's touch: silken shadows beckon my world, come fall Lightly shifting a cloud or two, Daniel 8)
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Shadow_Angel Full Member Offline I love YaBB 1G - SP1! Posts: 72 Joined: Dec 26^th, 2006	Re: Cinquains Reply #12 - Feb 16^th, 2007 at 1:13am	Print Post
	~ hiya, Daniel... had a look through my archives and found a Cinquain Sentinel Sky eyes, watcher in mist… behold of love's touch, silken shadows beckon, the sky to fall © Sasha ‘06


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #11 - Oct 16^th, 2003 at 12:22pm	Print Post
	Quote: Hi Daniel, I think this would qualify as an acrostic too, where the first letter of each line spells out a word. So, does that make this an ... acrostic cinquain or a cinquain(ly) or cinquain(atic) acrostic? Take care. alien It surely is an acrostic, as I intended it. As to what to call it, well . . . who knows? Interesting suggestions! How about insanely crossed-up cinquain? Here's another one to ponder: to youse used ewes: Two ewes commiserate about bygone ram – on all the things he couldn’t give a dam © Daniel J Ricketts 14 Oct 2003 and if you want to make it into a Cinquain Train, just do as I've done in the following: A dam (Song says it’s so!) cannot so long withstand against one optimistic ram Eye’m butt! I’m but a silly bard who mayhaps should be barred from writing out his silliness like this. Like this? Then add cinquain or even two or three: begin yours with the final word of mine © Daniel J Ricketts 16 Oct 2003 So... add your own independent cinquain, or take the 'challenge' and write one beginning with "Of mine" Lightly, Daniel 8)


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alien Full Member Offline Still so much to learn... Posts: 367 Location: Australia Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #10 - Oct 5^th, 2003 at 4:22am	Print Post
	Hi Daniel, Quote: Sadly another day vanished with little joy; our new day need not end with such regret. I think this would qualify as an acrostic too, where the first letter of each line spells out a word. So, does that make this an ... acrostic cinquain or a cinquain(ly) or cinquain(atic) acrostic? Take care. alien


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silkenlightning Supreme Member Offline Goddess of Burning Socks Posts: 1419 Location: Greenbelt, MD Joined: Aug 11^th, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #9 - Oct 5^th, 2003 at 1:28am	Print Post
	I heard an entirely different definition for a cinquain, I think I need to find it again... Salem


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WildCityWoman Supreme Member Offline Yeah - me again! Still rockin'! Posts: 4415 Location: Toronto, Canada Joined: Sep 19^th, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #8 - Oct 4^th, 2003 at 3:53pm	Print Post
	One of my latest cinquains Taste it . . . . Let each flake melt on the tip of your tongue; save the bones for spitting into the wind Carly Svamvour - October 3, 2003


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Assigned Reply #7 - Sep 17^th, 2003 at 1:02pm	Print Post
	Assigned Danger! Keep off jetty! So here I sit, in force, assuring others will obey as signed. © Daniel J Ricketts 16 Sept 2003 .


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #6 - Sep 16^th, 2003 at 12:03am	Print Post
	Savor Sadly another day vanished with little joy; our new day need not end with such regret. © Daniel J Ricketts 15 Sept 2003


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Re: Cinquains Reply #5 - Aug 5^th, 2003 at 7:04am	Print Post
	Hey, Mary! I must have missed your post by preparing mine around the same time you were posting, and then hitting "Post" and signing off! Anyhow, here's another one I'd had sittin' around and just edited some: Granny Souse Granny didn’t notice Red’s foxy sheep’s clothing; she’d got likker’d up . . . wolfed down with false hood © Daniel J Ricketts 05 August 2003


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Drizzle Reply #4 - Aug 3^rd, 2003 at 6:45am	Print Post
	Drizzle sprinkles my head: closed eyes fill with warming tiers of images, raining down in scents. © Daniel J Ricketts 2003


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YaBB-Developer Topic Starter Forum Administrator Offline Who cook YaBB Posts: 4 Location: Roggenstein Joined: Oct 12^th, 1990 Stimmung: tot	Re: Cinquains Reply #3 - Aug 3^rd, 2003 at 6:27am	Print Post
	Hi Daniel Thanks for adding two wonderful cinquains to our cinquain thread! I love 'em both but the acorn one is my favorite... Maybe I'm just a squirrelly LOL Mary


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Autumn Reply #2 - Aug 3^rd, 2003 at 6:15am	Print Post
	Autumn: what befalls trees. First they blush, then slowly remove their clothes to bed down friend winter. © Daniel J Ricketts 2003


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Just_Daniel Supreme Member Offline Slow down; things will go faster. ~ djr Posts: 8989 Location: South West New Jersey Joined: Aug 2^nd, 2003	Acorn Reply #1 - Aug 3^rd, 2003 at 6:12am	Print Post
	Acorn squirrels its way into a stump's lost dream, buries itself, dying to be an oak. © Daniel J Ricketts 2003


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YaBB-Developer Topic Starter Forum Administrator Offline Who cook YaBB Posts: 4 Location: Roggenstein Joined: Oct 12^th, 1990 Stimmung: tot	Cinquain ~ FOM June 07 Aug 2^nd, 2003 at 2:18pm	Print Post
	Cinquain -- I have heard this pronounced as (SinQwian) or (SingKane) This form is derived from the Japanese haiku. Sometimes described as The American Haiku, the American Cinquain was developed by poet Adelaide Crapsey in the early 1900’s. Some say this form dates back to the French Troubadours, but the form was so vague during that time that Crapsey is credited with defining and perfecting it as a distinct form. A cinquain consists of five lines of free verse following a simple but strict syllable setup: Line 1 = 2 syllables Line 2 = 4 syllables Line 3 = 6 syllables Line 4 = 8 syllables Line 5 = 2 syllables. When writing cinquains, there are a few things that you will want to try and avoid: 1. puns and trite humor 2. excessive use of pronouns, adverbs or adjective. They should be poetic and not a list of related descriptive words. 3. greeting card sentiment 4. awkward or unnatural line breaks 5. a staccato flow when read aloud. 6. rhyming Your cinquain should build to a climax that is concluded or summarized in the last line or two. This is similar to the ending of an Italian Sonnet. Here are two examples by the woman who is credited for introducing them to the world of poetry. TRIAD These be Three silent things: The falling snow... the hour Before the dawn... the mouth of one Just dead ADELAIDE CRAPSEY (1878-1914) NOVEMBER NIGHT Listen... With faint dry sound, Like steps of passing ghosts, The leaves, frost-crisp'd, break from the trees And fall. ADELAIDE CRAPSEY (1878-1914) Beacon my guiding light through dark and troubled times illuminating paths leading me home. and here is one of my own... Young feet dressed and covered in perfect rank and file rhythmically move in unison with grace. Mary
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